hei guys this is my first peminat fic. Please tell me what anda think about of it and comment!

I was sitting on the realm of Tides, at the beach. My kegemaran place!
"Hey Summer," berkata my best friend Sasha, Membaca a some catalog.
"Hey, what are anda looking at?" I said.
"Just the newest fashions of Teen Fairy! hei I'm thinking about going to Solaria to be a model. But I don't know if they're going to like me... can anda help?"
"Sure, why not. After all your my best friend," I said.
"Cool, know lets go to the mall and pick my outfit I'm going to model for them! berkata Sasha.

lebih comming soon
Have any ideas for the part 2?