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This is a what a wrote so far in the book I'm Penulisan too! I want to know if its good (if its bad give me tips and don't get mad if its bad I'm only 11 and it doesn't have a tajuk yet)
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Chapter one: unexpected things
“This is so much fun!” Alia screamed with excitement. Alia was flying over the greenest forest she ever seen! It was bigger than her families’ garden. (Alia’s family had a gigantic garden, and a lot of money to purchase plants) She wisped through the green trees feeling the refreshing air flow through her long brown wavy hair, making it a humongous mess. She saw something, a shadowy figure. “What’s that, who are you” Alia yelled. The small shadowy thing came closer. It didn’t reply. “Hello?” she yelled again.
Alia noticed it was just a boy flowing through the sky, like she was. The boy got closer. Without even noticing, the boy bumped into her and they both fell through the trees and hit the forest floor. Alia tore part of her bright blue dress on a pokok branch. “Ow” Alia and the boy berkata at the same time. “Sorry didn’t see anda there, I’m Daniel” the boy berkata as he stood up and pulled Alia up as well. “It’s all good” She berkata as she looked at her torn dress.
They began walking toward an oversized tree. “Lia, Lia” a colorful nuri, burung nuri berkata in the background. It was standing sejak the tree. It sounded like her mother “Alia Alia, wake up” the nuri, burung nuri berkata again. Allia opened up her eyes drowsily. “Sorry to wake anda honey, but I really wanted to introduce your new Piano teacher” Alia’s mother said. “What happened to Ms. Harley” She asked with her eyes shut. “She quit and I don’t know why” her mother replied. Alia finally opened her eyes. She looked at her new Piano teacher. He looked familiar and looked about her age. He’s brown smooth hair even looked familiar. “Daniel!?” She blurted out. “How do anda know my name I didn’t even introduce myself yet?” Daniel asked with an akward look on his face. “Um… lucky guess” she said.
Alia blushed and then heard the loud door loceng ring and she ran downstairs. Daniel followed her. Al
Chapter one: unexpected things
“This is so much fun!” Alia screamed with excitement. Alia was flying over the greenest forest she ever seen! It was bigger than her families’ garden. (Alia’s family had a gigantic garden, and a lot of money to purchase plants) She wisped through the green trees feeling the refreshing air flow through her long brown wavy hair, making it a humongous mess. She saw something, a shadowy figure. “What’s that, who are you” Alia yelled. The small shadowy thing came closer. It didn’t reply. “Hello?” she yelled again.
Alia noticed it was just a boy flowing through the sky, like she was. The boy got closer. Without even noticing, the boy bumped into her and they both fell through the trees and hit the forest floor. Alia tore part of her bright blue dress on a pokok branch. “Ow” Alia and the boy berkata at the same time. “Sorry didn’t see anda there, I’m Daniel” the boy berkata as he stood up and pulled Alia up as well. “It’s all good” She berkata as she looked at her torn dress.
They began walking toward an oversized tree. “Lia, Lia” a colorful nuri, burung nuri berkata in the background. It was standing sejak the tree. It sounded like her mother “Alia Alia, wake up” the nuri, burung nuri berkata again. Allia opened up her eyes drowsily. “Sorry to wake anda honey, but I really wanted to introduce your new Piano teacher” Alia’s mother said. “What happened to Ms. Harley” She asked with her eyes shut. “She quit and I don’t know why” her mother replied. Alia finally opened her eyes. She looked at her new Piano teacher. He looked familiar and looked about her age. He’s brown smooth hair even looked familiar. “Daniel!?” She blurted out. “How do anda know my name I didn’t even introduce myself yet?” Daniel asked with an akward look on his face. “Um… lucky guess” she said.
Alia blushed and then heard the loud door loceng ring and she ran downstairs. Daniel followed her. Al
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