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Do anda like this?

its a poem i made about school (its just a joke thats not how i feel about school):

school is not cool
it's just cruel,
teachers want anda to do maths
because its one of their wrath,
they'll make anda in detention
and when anda ask they just won't mention,
they'll give anda tests
so anda do your best,
(but really they just do it to torture us)

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LOL i liked it do u write little poems like these a lot?
ryofangirl posted hampir setahun yang lalu
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ya i do and thank anda
StarGirl1721 posted hampir setahun yang lalu
 StarGirl1721 posted hampir setahun yang lalu
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Bananaaddict said:
I think it's funny! But here are some suggestions:
1. anda should capitalize the first letter in each line, unless you're trying to mimic e. e. cummings.
2. I don't know if 'wrath' can be used in that context atau as a plural noun.
3. anda can't 'make' someone in detention. How about put?
4. The last line doesn't rhym, with doesn't really matter since it could be free verse, but the rest of the poem does rhym, so it's sort of messing with a pattern anda already laid out for yourself.
Of course, anda don't have to do any of that. They're just suggestions.
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posted hampir setahun yang lalu 
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thanks i will try to do it seterusnya time
StarGirl1721 posted hampir setahun yang lalu
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hahah i berkata detentions cause i have heard of some teachers they just make u in detention and when anda ask they won't answer and change the subject so thats why i telah diposkan that
StarGirl1721 posted hampir setahun yang lalu
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No detention is fine, it's just that someone "make" anda in detention makes no sense. It would be better if it was "put" anda in detention.
Bananaaddict posted hampir setahun yang lalu
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