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Are these poems any good?

I walked through the barren desert
Not a drop of water
Not a sign of life
But as I walked at last I saw a colour
Standing on its own I saw a rose
The only life
The only hope
I bent down to pick the rose
But I did not
For it could change the place
Spread the life
Instead of dying it could bring a light in the midnight sky
And colour when all else is grey




anda always feed yourself those stupid lies
Always say they don't see the anguish behind your eyes 
Maybe they don't
And maybe I do
I see the soul resting inside of you
It screams
It cries
It needs someone to hear it
It bleeds
And howls into the dark night
No one's there to hear it
anda curse
anda scream
anda cry
But still they call anda inhuman 
anda love
anda kiss
Your hati, tengah-tengah can break
But to them you're just an ugly slut
But trust me on this
In what I say to you
This pain can't last as no pain does
When your hati, tengah-tengah doesn't beat
As anda fail to breathe
The pain so very slowly dies with you
Be sure you're not alone
If anda are not the pain with end
There will be no one to receive it
anda will be forgotten
anda won't make a difference
You'll have accomplished nothing
All anda will have done is Lost your pain
So at least die peacefully. 




I sat alone on that rainy day
The sun seemed so far away
Not a single person saw me
They all seemed to be blurred 
Just walked on by
Could they not see I was crying?
Could they not see the bruise on my face?
atau were they just afraid of talking?
Why did they leave me alone?
It was that hari I left them
It was the hari they could have helped
But later my own blood poured down
Slits in my skin
A pisau in my hand
Empty bottle in the other. 




I saw him on a dreary day
As every hari is to me
I saw him on a lonely day
As I never have a friend with me
I thought him beautiful 
I began to grow to Cinta him
But not until I heard his voice did Cinta no longer describe it
His eyes like gems they shone
His lips like midni
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It cut off some of it, sorry.
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it's fine :3
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pokemonfan909 said:
Is it?...
Yeah..it is. I like them...They seem straight ke hadapan but there's a lot of metaphors in there.
Good job!
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No problem..Just being honest. I could relate to them..I guess...
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Oh, ok.
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True-Finn-Fan said:
your poem's good i think... i don't know, i'm not a good judge of poems. i like everything to rhyme X3 like ~

"every rose has thorns
but not all thorns come with roses
this is because it only warns
of the threat it poses."


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We all know puisi doesn't have to rhyme, we're saying it's ok if it does and it's still good.
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^exactly
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BlondLionEzel said:
I like them :)

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Dudespie said:
Beautiful :)
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tamore said:
s'alright
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Thanks! How can I improve?
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Ichigo127 said:
i, for one, think it's really good =D
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^^
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luv_warriorcatz said:
it's not too bad, though still pretty cheesy especially that saat one
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