OK, I know my sebelumnya fanfictions pretty much suck, so... Give me some feedback, please. I think that this site is dead. :( Also, I have a new-ish OC. Let me know if I get any facts off.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white kot hud, hood tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to tunjuk the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do anda have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black hud, hood pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do anda have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She berkata in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya atau something." "Aslyxia, anda pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up sejak me for the story.)
~Five minit Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because anda are older and male, anda can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are anda cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the kerusi, tempat duduk as I lean against the dinding of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her hud, hood off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I hayun, swing my legs off the kerusi, tempat duduk and sit normally. "I hope anda are a good partner, Edward. I can discard anda from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered sejak this. He shoots back, "What do anda have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white kot hud, hood tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to tunjuk the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do anda have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black hud, hood pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do anda have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She berkata in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya atau something." "Aslyxia, anda pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up sejak me for the story.)
~Five minit Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because anda are older and male, anda can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are anda cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the kerusi, tempat duduk as I lean against the dinding of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her hud, hood off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I hayun, swing my legs off the kerusi, tempat duduk and sit normally. "I hope anda are a good partner, Edward. I can discard anda from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered sejak this. He shoots back, "What do anda have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
I'm going to make fanfic artikel-artikel with my avatar: Vengeance. This is about her. Please enjoy. :D
Name: Vengeance <her actual name is unknown>
Age: 13
Alchemy: Metal, Chains, Ice, Air
State Alchemist Name: Feral Alchemist
Age When Became A State Alchemist: 8
Appearance: Brown hair with no bangs that is pulled into a ponytail that is dyed blue green, dark blue eyes, the same jaket Ed wears but is light gray, light gray gloves, black jeans, brown knee length boots. She wears a sword sheath on her back that has alchemical powers.
Bio: She was 7 when her mother, father, and two brothers were killed. She tried to bring them back and Lost her left leg to the knee, part of her right side and her right arm to the shoulder.
Name: Vengeance <her actual name is unknown>
Age: 13
Alchemy: Metal, Chains, Ice, Air
State Alchemist Name: Feral Alchemist
Age When Became A State Alchemist: 8
Appearance: Brown hair with no bangs that is pulled into a ponytail that is dyed blue green, dark blue eyes, the same jaket Ed wears but is light gray, light gray gloves, black jeans, brown knee length boots. She wears a sword sheath on her back that has alchemical powers.
Bio: She was 7 when her mother, father, and two brothers were killed. She tried to bring them back and Lost her left leg to the knee, part of her right side and her right arm to the shoulder.