Twilight Saga Eclipse: Edward&Bella

Authors note: This is a different story to what I normally do. So tell me what anda think if I should continue. And the Vampire called Marie-louise is me btw.

Bellas POV
"Mamma? Dadda?" I didn't know where I was. I was lost. All I had was my faithful teddy. Mr cuddles was in my hand and I was cluthcing on it like there was no tomorrow. I am Lost in the woods. No one around me, and I'm scared. What if a monster comes to get me? I'm only a 6 tahun old girl, and my parents just left me here. I try running but I was too scared. Then all of a sudden I heard a voice. "Anyone here?" My parents told me...

set a few months after breaking dawn
please tell me how I can improve... I want to write the best story I can

Part 1

Juliet- I walked through the large room rather absentmindedly. I had recently developed a slight interest in medicine and so I had decided to attend a conference. There were enough families there. A teenager wouldn't stick out. I had never really done anything with my life. Maybe I could be a doctor. If I was being honest with myself I would admit that I was just searching for something to ease my guilt. I had never contributed much to the universe. I had potential, not because...