This is a bit from a book i;m Penulisan called rise of the dead and i was wondering what anda all think before i consider moving to the seterusnya chapter

The creature was almost inhuman; it was almost skeletal with rotting skin, roots that nearly consumed its eyes. It had dry hair and blood-stained rags for clothing, Jennifer was able to make out the black tie around its throat.
The creature suddenly jerked its head up toward Jennifer then let out a mixture of a grunt and a howl, she froze. Jennifer’s legs had become heavy and rigid; she was too stricken with fear to move. The creature, with an animalistic lurch, stood up and began to rapidly shuffle toward Jennifer. Jennifer, hati, tengah-tengah pounding and mind racing, attempted to back away but Lost her footing and fell to her back.
The creature, its eyes locked ravenously onto Jennifer, was yards away from her, growing closer sejak the second. Jennifer, in desperation, began to crawl away, but her efforts seemed to be meaningless. The creature was above her now, Jennifer screamed as loudly as she could as it lunged forward.
Jennifer closed her eyes and raised her hands to protect her face, the creatures’ rancid breathe fuming up her nostrils. There a perpecahan, berpecah saat where Jennifer expected herself to wake up from a nightmare, but she her mind was racing too much to fool her.
All of a sudden, there was a loud cracking noise and then a thud. Jennifer opened her eyes to see Seth standing over her with a baseball bat gripped tightly in his hands, his eyes were wide with panic.
“Jen, are anda okay?”he exclaimed in a shaky, breathless voice.