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Who is Mary Sue, anda ask?

She is a pest, a scourge, a CURSE upon the world of fiction; a dull, cliche character who mostly invades the peminat fiction universe (especially in fandoms like Lord of the Rings atau Harry Potter), but can also be found in original work, TV shows, books, movies, etc. In peminat fiction, she's usually the fangirl's way of inserting herself in the story and pairing herself up with the cutest/hottest character. This infamous evil can be identified sejak the following traits:

1: She is stunningly/unusually beautiful. Oh she may deny it, claiming to be a "plain Jane" and modestly deflecting any compliments on her looks, but everyone else in the story will be sure to drool all over her. Mary Sue is perfection incarnate - perfect hair, perfect eyes (the kind that "sparkle like jewels" atau "pierce into your soul"), perfect skin, perfect figure, gorgeous gowns/snazzy leather warrior outfits, cool-looking weapons, etc...though she may menanggung, bear a striking resemblance to the penulis of the story. And she sometimes shares the author's name (that includes middle, last, nicknames, acronyms, etc.) Mary Sue could easily be described as an "author's pet" atau a self-insert.

2: She has multiple special abilities atau skills (like she can somehow "wield a blade" really well without years of training and experience...unless, of course, she's been trained sejak the best since age four). There's nothing she can't do atau excel at, everything gets handed to her on a silver platter, and her Speshulness knows no bounds. She could be a shape-shifter with Super Powerful Shiny Magic and a wow-the-crowd Singing voice, atau a genius computer hacker who can play the flute and violin, has a black tali pinggang in karate AND can recite encyclopedia excerpts on a dime, atau a half-angel warrior princess who sends the Bad Guys buggering off just sejak going all "echo-y voice and holy light"...you get the idea.

3: Going hand in hand with the above, she's always being uber-heroic, rescuing Rawak people and saving the day. The fate of Life, The Universe and Everything depends on her. Without her Speshulness to aid the Good Guys in the epic battle, the Bad Guys are sure to win and the world is utterly DOOMED.

4: She's kind and virtuous (unless she's an EVIL Mary Sue) and has no big character flaws of any kind. (And no. Clumsiness and/or a feisty temper do NOT count; they're far too generic and only serve to make her look "cute".) She's usually either a "sweet angel" type, "mysterious woman" type atau the "rebellious princess" type.

5: At least one character falls immediately/insanely in Cinta with her, and vice versa (usually the hottest guy. Go figure.)

6: All the good characters in the story just seem naturally drawn to her (especially children and fuzzy animals). She's popular where it matters. EVERYONE likes her. Except the Bad Guys, of course...as well as any unimportant characters who serve no other purpose in the story than to be annoying and/or jealous of her utter perfection.

7: Sometimes there is a prophecy atau legend about her. Usually it says something about her Speshulness, an all-important destiny, Twoo Wuv written in the stars, blah blah blah...

8: She is portrayed as being cooler/more mature atau lebih important/powerful than everyone else in the story. Though on the flip side, she could also be portrayed as the poor, defenseless, yet ever courageous damsel-in-distress. Everything's always either about her atau her love-interest. She doesn't know the meaning of "teamwork" and she steals the spotlight from everyone else.

9: She often has a tragic/angsty/mysterious past and her Cinta interest has to "heal her wounded heart" atau something. If she doesn't have a tragic/angsty/mysterious past, she always finds SOMETHING to angst about...and of course, her Twoo Wuv always rushes to comfort her. Oy.

10: She is so darn perfect and 2-dimensional that it's annoying and boring. She's either so perfect, so weird atau so lacking in personality that the readers can't relate to her atau grow to truly care about her as her own character. Strip away the beauty, the magic powers, the all-important destiny and the Cinta interest and what do anda have underneath? Virtually nothing.

Now that we've met Mary Sue, let me introduce anda to her lesser-known cousins! Yeah, that's right...she has relatives.

Meet Gary Stu, the boy version of Mary Sue! He can be all of the above, as well as being the muscular, uberly-hot guy who's always saving the damsels in distress, bravely fighting the Bad Guys, hacking into computers like an expert and diffusing the bomb that's hidden in the wedding cake with the pair of pliers he just happened to have in his pocket.

Last and definitely least, there's Marty Sam. He's closely related to Gary Stu, only he's a lot lebih sensitive and angsty. Usually he has a dark, super-tragic past (like his alcoholic dad beat him as a kid atau something) and he's always throwing melodramatic pity parties about how miserable and wretched he is. He swoons over the beautiful girl of his dreams and goes on and on about how he's such a HORRIBLE MONSTER who's oh-so-unworthy of her. He can be every bit as hawt as Gary Stu, atau he can pull a Hunchback of Dotredame routine, i. e. so ugly that his beautiful Cinta interest can't help but take pity on him and fall in Cinta with him for his "beautiful, broken heart".

So how can anda avoid turning your characters into Mary Sues/Gary Stus/Marty Sams?

Well, one thing I've found that leads to a Mary-Sue is getting too attached to your heroine. anda might have a brilliant back story for your girl, but does the audience really need to know every detail? anda might have designed every ounce of her clothing and styled her hair just right, but is it integral to the plot? Probably not. A lot of the time what makes a Mary-Sue so awful is that so much of the focus is on this character that no one Membaca the story really cares all that much about her.

Another thing to keep in mind is to avoid having the character be too flawed. If anda have a character that has a terminal illness, a bad back, is blind, can't hear, and is wielding a sword in battle and totally kicking butt and saving the day, you've got a problem. It's fine to have a character with one of those "flaws" atau traits, but not all of them, and make them act accordingly. Make sure the flaws have something to do with the story and aren't just things anda stick in to make her appear less perfect. Too flawed is just as bad as too perfect.

AFTERTHOUGHT: It should be noted that there IS such a thing as a "good" Mary Sue, and that there are a few exceptions where characters can have a lot of the symptoms above and NOT be a Mary Sue (like the elves in Lord of the Rings, for instance). There are many examples of "good" Mary Sues out there, such as Nancy Drew, Sarah Crew from A Little Princess, Buffy the Vampire Slayer and other characters. What makes them different from other Mary Sues is that they are all believable, vibrant, well-rounded, likable characters that people can root for.

Having berkata that, DON'T get cocky. These kinds of exceptions are rare. Most likely, if anda have written a main character into one of your stories who possesses many atau all of these qualities, anda have created a Mary Sue (or one of her cousins). So get someone to look over your work, lest this infamous pest overtake you!

If anda would like to test your character for Mary Sue symptoms, I highly suggest visiting these sites:

The Universal Mary Sue Litmus Test
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The Writer's Mary Sue Test:
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posted by ashesandwine
Thanks to MISSLOVATOSTAR1 for the "snow white skin", to Emmett4ever for convincing me to keep it going and for believing in my writing:D But still you're better than me, hon!!! I Cinta your story:D Be sure to check out Emmett4ever spot and her story... It's AWESOME!!! Thanks to everyone for the support and for the comments:D


"Daniel's POV"

My all life as been turned apart, but I have to believe that we will find a way to stay together... Our Cinta is strong and I will not give up until I'm dead atau she back in my arms!
I'll remember her full lips, her beautiful green eyes, her light brown hair...
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Chapter Seventeen

After she applied about two coats of Julie’s tube of black-brown mascara courtesy of Cover Girl, Jamie closed the tube and was about to give it back to Julie but when she saw her little sister, Julie was busy flirting with a man with short gray hair that somewhat looks like their father atau of what Julie might saw the man in front of her, Anderson Cooper. Jamie was about to puke when she saw those two and making sure that she doesn’t do that, Jamie Thomas just slipped the small tube into her dompet, beg tangan and after she threw the half-filled plastic cup of coffee into the wastebasket,...
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posted by nEvEr-tHe-sAme
A flock of raging crows quickly swifted down the eerie tree. Filling every possible spot on it's long dead branches. With the wind gushing, and the fall season coming to an end, the changing leaves have slowly made its way down the cold, wet grass. It had been a depressing day, the sun hiding behind the fluffy grey clouds, and the weather so cold and so warm at the same time... with rain slowly falling at ease, its the perfect time to mourn.


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Awakening slowly to the cold air I felt all around me, I slowly open my eyes. With my body feeling like it'll explode any second,...
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chapter 4:Robert helps me
The night was so lonely and scary. I was hoping that the sun rises fast, as I was very frightened. It finally happened after that dark and lonely night. I was very tired as I walked all night, but I was surprised when I found myself not very far from Ema’s house. I sat on my bag thinking of everything happened, but mostly thinking about the way I feel about Patrick. I was wondering what made me think that he loved me. Is it because he berkata I’m beautiful? Well lots of men told me that I’m beautiful but that doesn’t necessarily means that he is attracted to me....
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A little something that I wrote for English class but actually, it was my final and I got 100% on it!! Enjoy!!

The Disappearance of Claire Daniels

I don’t know where my daughter went. One moment, I was holding Claire’s little hand while doing some window shopping but a few saat later, I spotted something at a clothing store window and was into it and wondering if the store have any chance that they have it in my size that I didn’t noticed that I didn’t felt little Claire Daniels’s hand slipping away from mine.

When I wanted to go into the store and see if they got that little black...
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posted by BuffyFaithFan1
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INTRODUCTION...
You have just entered a world. A world like no other! This world is not like TWILIGHT atau House Of Night atau HARRY POTTER atau any other world anda are thinking of right about now. This world is way different. Where only a good bunch of people in the population live. The world has been divided into six parts: the WaterLands, the EarthLands, the AirLands, the FireLands, the ExtraLands, and the NoOneZone. Only one hundred people make up our world. And only 16.666666 people live inside each part. It sounds pretty depressing, I know, but this is how this world is! The...
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posted by Edward_lover101
Plz do not be afraid to tell me what anda think! plz commet. I'm Penulisan a book and i was woundering what some of anda think. Please commet!!

Chapter 1

"Anna May get in here right away! Don't make me get the swicht little girl" Hollore mama.
"Comming mama! I was doing my chors." i hollerd back.
I live on a farm with my mother and out two slaves Jim and Nacy.my father ran out on us when my mother found out that when he got drunk that he would comeinto my roo at night and touch me in places that didn't fell right. He told me that if I ever told anyone that he would kill me, i belived him. So it is...
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posted by brooki
Here's the saat chapter to Small Town!

"What do anda think anda are doing? Are anda trying to kill me, Anya?" She had picked out one of my least-favorite Filem she knew I did not like at all. But on the other hand, I knew we probably wouldn't be whatching the movie very long. Darrel was having a party at his house in about an hour. Long enough for Anya's parents to think that we were asleep.

"Oh please. It's not really that bad." Anya berkata while on her way to get the popcorn from her dapur just around the corner.

"Oh, come on, Anya. Can we please go now? I mean, your parents went to katil over...
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posted by jasperwhlover
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Chapter 3

Now, Serenity on a happier note was learning how to defend herself and about Exorcism she wanted to help Father Bartholomew, even though she was forced sejak the church to conform to the earthly practices like everyone else and to hide her wings, Father Bartholomew encouraged her heavenly attributes, he made wings, of feathers, waxed together, they were perfect, and everyday, he would teach her to fly as she forgot how because of the number of years that she spent conforming to the earth. Father Bartholomew raised Serenity like a daughter, a few years later, when she had...
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posted by khfan12
Thie is something me and my friend are working on.


He returned that evening, feeling even worse. “Where were you?” Mercy met him on the front porch. She looked like she had been crying. Danny looked at her. It felt like a pisau had been shoved through his heart. He winced as he started up the stairs. “I went out.”
“Where?” Mercy’s hand reached for him. He pulled away and started into the house. “Danny...” Mercy’s voice followed him into the front room. “I was so worried. I thought….”
Suddenly, Danny couldn’t stand it any longer. Why did she have to Cinta him? He turned...
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posted by BiteMeCullen107
As we left the apartment building the sun hit us like a beam of light. I look to the side, I saw Jason putting his hand in the face of the sun like he was going to die from it.
“Are anda okay?” I asked concerned that it was to much for him. He looked down at me and smiled. “Ya I’m go, I just have to get my sunglasses on. My eyes are just really sensitive to the light.” I nodded waiting patiently for him. He slipped on a pare of black sunglasses. The kind anda see know a days on selebriti when the go out. “Nice.” I berkata with a warming smiled. He looked back down at me and smiled....
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Chapter Four

At ten in the morning, Jamie was helping Mac practice with her Bola sepak sejak being the goalie and blocking her oldest daughter‘s every move, kicking the ball into the net at their little backyard of their bata, brownstone house in the section of Georgetown in the city of Washington, DC where both Jamie and Michael went to college there, lived at and raised their three kids at for almost fifteen years.

Two hours before the practice, after having an extended breakfast with their father and mother, Mac and Izzie did their bath-taking, teeth-brushing, toothpaste- spitting, toilet-using, and...
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posted by VampirePrinsess
Memories would drift off like winter fog
They fade like a mist
But I saw anda in a memory that stayed like the perfect hari
You brought life into my colorless world
You brought the true meaning of the word 'friend'
He was my best friend
I would always Cinta him, and it would never, ever be enough
I would be there for him, lend him a shoulder
But the days that I just wasn't enough were the days I dreaded
The days he wasn't himself
He had pride, sometimes to much to the point of war
He was respecful to friends, he was kind and funny
He was everything anda loved in a friend
But the hari he left...that...
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posted by gossip-girl999
A/N: This was just a task I had for homework write a short story less than 2 pages of your choice so I thought I'd post it here see what everyone thought. Thanks for reading. xoxo

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We're not in Kansas anymore

        It's any teenagers dream to up sticks from a dreary country town and alih into the hustle and bustle of the city but for Alyssa that was the dream she wished to come true but it just made her appreciate the saying be careful what anda wish for even more.
        The rain was falling down on the City....
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I thought it would be a good idea to try and write goodbye
but i was stuck when I realized there were too many lovely things to write about.
and not enough words invented yet to say them aloud.

and i know there are a number of things wrong with this,
but i really don't want to fix it right now.
i don't feel like doing anything but sitting upside down

but trust me, when it comes down
to having the choice of being right..
atau protecting you, I'll be wrong every single time.
Because it's just who I am...
Chapter Two

When Jamie got to the berangan, coklat tua oak door of Michael’s den, she put her fist on the surface and knocked on it while asking her husband, “Michael, are anda there?” There was a minit of silence that came after that and after waiting for a response, still in the den, Michael asked the person who was asking him that soalan about him being there, “Yeah, I’m in here. Who’s it?”

Facing the door, Jamie berkata back to him, “It’s me, Jamie.” After telling him that, Jamie heard some groaning behind the door and right away, she knew that Michael had might be annoyed at her because...
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Keep in mind I have no idea what chapter this will be but I got this idea yesterday so I wrote it last night. Actually I had two ideas of how my two main characters would kiss. I'll write and put up a different version of their first Ciuman some time soon. I actually had tears in my eyes when I wrote this

I storm outside of the house and plop myself down on the sofa outside. I feel my eyes tear. It's so unfair. My tears overflow my eyes.
"Hey Starr what's wrong?" A voice asks behind me. I look behind me and see Elliot
"Oh hei Elliot. Nothing is wrong," I say wiping my eyes
Elliot sits down next...
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posted by jasperwhlover
Chapter 2

The priest was reciting a prayer, stuttering heavily, Serenity realized that he was scared and replied, “Fear not for I am Serenity the Angel of peace, I know not why my wings resemble the midnight blue that dawns when the sun goes to rest, I know not my purpose on this earth for my father the Lord, God did not verse me of this strange happening”. The priest believed Serenity and taught Serenity human activities, the priest, father Bartholomew, raised Serenity as his own. Now, father Bartholomew, being an exorcist sent many demons and evil artifices of the devil back to hell,...
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posted by jasperwhlover
Wishful Thinking

Introduction: I thought it was a sweet beginning, a chance to start anew, no looking back, nor turning. What I’ve found here, has me in its grasp, it’s captured me in its spell. But like every sweet beginning we never know how the story ends.


Hi, I’m Alicia Alice Davidson, but anda can call me Alice. I’m from a family of five, and I go to the best High School in the country, I’m confident and I follow my instincts I’m a fighter mentally and physically. It started off as the same boring, disappointing hari I was used to, at my school, it’s an all girl school anda see....
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posted by jasperwhlover
Wishful Thinking

Introduction: I thought it was a sweet beginning, a chance to start anew, no looking back, nor turning. What I’ve found here, has me in its grasp, it’s captured me in its spell. But like every sweet beginning we never know how the story ends.


Hi, I’m Alicia Alice Davidson, but anda can call me Alice. I’m from a family of five, and I go to the best High School in the country, I’m confident and I follow my instincts I’m a fighter mentally and physically. It started off as the same boring, disappointing hari I was used to, at my school, it’s an all girl school anda see....
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