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posted by ellie_bellie135
When anda use greif in your Penulisan it's very important anda get it right so here is a short artikel to help you.

Here is an extract from link

Grief is a somewhat commplicated and misunderstood emotion. Yet, grief is something that, unfortunately, we must all experience at some time atau other. We will all inevitably experience loss. Whether it is a loss through death, divorce atau some other loss, the stages of grieving are the same.

The five stages of grief are:

1-Denial-"this can't be happening to me", looking for the former spouse in familia places, atau if it is death, setting the meja, jadual for the person atau Berlakon as if they are still in living there. No crying. Not accepting atau even acknowledging the loss.


2-Anger-"why me?", feelings of wanting to fight back atau get even with spouse of divorce, for death, anger at the deceased, blaming them for leaving.


3-Bargaining-bargaining often takes place before the loss. Attempting to make deals with the spouse who is leaving, atau attempting to make deals with God to stop atau change the loss. Begging, wishing, praying for them to come back.


4-Depression-overwhelming feelings of hopelessness, frustration, bitterness, self pity, mourning loss of person as well as the hopes, dreams and plans for the future. Feeling lack of control, feeling numb. Perhaps feeling suicidal.


5-Acceptance-there is a difference between resignation and acceptance. anda have to accept the loss, not just try to menanggung, bear it quietly. Realization that it takes two to make atau break a marriage. Realization that the person is gone (in death) that it is not their fault, they didn't leave anda on purpose. (even in cases of suicide, often the deceased person, was not in their right frame of mind) Finding the good that can come out of the pain of loss, finding comfort and healing. Our goals turn toward personal growth. Stay with fond memories of person.



When anda write it's very important anda use these steps properly and in that order.
Thought it's very tempting to make your character angry, grief is lebih powerful than anger.
Though grief shouldn't be misused for minor things when anger would be lebih apropiate.

A good example of this, I think, is in Wolverine, when his wife was killed and he was instantly angry. I thought something was a bit off about it and that it was a bit cold and the reason for this was I don't think it was powerful enough. This is because anger was used when it should have been denial. And though it was well done, it could have been better if the writer had been lebih skillful when using grief. (I'm not bagging out Wolverine. It's one of my favortie movies. PLEASE DON'T SUE ME.)

I hope this will help to improve your writing.

Thank anda for reading.

Happy writing.
posted by tayandkris4evr
 Little Jack
Little Jack
I got some feedback from some people who read my story and they berkata they had a lot of soalan about it. I didn't explain it as well as I wanted to. So I apologize. I hope this can make up for it. :)
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Everything was burning. It was so hot and my eyes stung. It felt like I was bleeding... badly. I felt dizzy... so dizzy...

I woke up 2 days later in a white room with medical stuff in it. Almost every inch of my body was covered in thick white cloth. I couldn't alih my arms atau legs. It was even a strugle to breathe...

I vaguely remembered the fire....
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    Chapter 2
                    LUNCH
I sat where Jill was sitting. The same people from before. The blonde
Kid, the reporter with a few other people. They introduced themselves.
And I giggled when they all were done. I berkata "I laugh a lot...sorry"
Ken rolled his eyes. I cracked up. Mart the one who bumped into me asked me "so Estella--" "call me Stella" I interrupted. "So Stella would anda
Like to grab makan, kantin sometime?" I laughed "sure!" ken just rolled his
Eyes, it made me...
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Hello everyone! :] This is only a draft to a chapter of the first story of a series (Shattering Suns) I'm Penulisan and, when I'm through, publishing. Since it's my first chapter, I want to be sure this story is interesting enough. Forgive me if there are any proofreading mistakes. I've been too busy to proofread every line. Please do komen and tell me what anda think! Thankies so so much for willingly Membaca and sharing your helpful thoughts. Take care sweethearts, and enjoy! :D ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Blissful Ignorance
My name is Naomi Hart. I am a sixteen tahun old...
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posted by tayandkris4evr
 I'm thinking of this guy resembling Jack. *Disclaimer*
I'm thinking of this guy resembling Jack. *Disclaimer*
"Run, anda idiot!"
"I am!"
Niki and I just robbed a gas station. We pointed our Colt's at the cashier, then tied him up. Sweat dripped off my face as we loaded our trash bags full of Makanan and money. I didn't think we'd make it in time before the cops came. But, miraculously we packed up quick enough.
"Alright man, head over to those hills, here take this, I'm gonna go knock that guy out."
Niki nodded and took the two trash bags. His blonde hair falling around his head, soaked with sweat.
I ran back into the station, and went over to the cashier. I asked him if there was anybody else here and...
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posted by iluvPrinceMJ213
How is it possible for there to be possible to be lebih trouble?

    “ hei Cindy” Thomas shouts from across the room. I put a finger to my lips. Just as Mrs. Fitzgerald turns to Thomas and says “ Mr. Carlson sit down.’ “ What eva teach.” “ Now class since its pride time we are going to come up with ways to ask your teachers things and what are things to ask.” Thomas then throws a paper airplane to me with a message when Mrs. Fitzgerald isn’t looking. I begin to unfold the paper airplane just when Jaylee the school brat snatches it out of my hands and shouts...
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posted by summer448
I opened my bedroom window to let in an evening brezee. All of the trees have been bare for a while, exposing the cloudless sky. Letting out a sight i rested my head on my hand and leaned out letting the wind whip across my face. Today is the very last hari of winter break,then its back to school till spring. May as well enjoy it. "ARTIE JONES, GET DOWN HERE RIGHT THIS saat I WOULD LIKE TO HAVE A WORD WITH YOU!" My mom yelled vioentley from down stairs. Sluggishly I stood up and walked out of my room. "Mom my name is amy." I berkata walking down the steps. She just glared at me. " anda can change...
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 A little bit on what Sayuri looks like:)
A little bit on what Sayuri looks like:)
Okay, so here's the third chapter of this! Hope anda all like and PLEASE COMMENT!! ^.^


We immediately arrive in Hollow Bas- I mean, The Radiant Garden.

"Let's go find Leon and everyone," Sora said, and along the way to Merlin's house, we saw just how much this place has improved.
When we came to the house, Sora opened the door and went in before Kairi and I could stop him and tell him to knock first.

"Hey, everybody!" Sora shouted to everyone, and they all jumped.

"Huh? Sora..." Leon mumbled after he jumped.

"Jeez, Sora! Ever heard of knocking?" Yuffie asked him and he smiled sheepishly.

"We're here...
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CHAPTER 1

“Where the fuck is he?!” Simon was getting really pissed already. Jacob was supposed to be back an jam ago. He promised Adele he wouldn't be late. While waiting, Simon turned on the TV. He laid down to the couch, drinking beer, waiting for the news to start. Adele came back from the kitchen, drinking epal, apple juice, “I don't know. Calm down, please, Simon.” she replied. “And don't drink!”
“Why not?” Simon asked her.
“Because,” she said, grabbing the bir bottle from him, throwing it away, “First, you're not old enough to be drinking, you're fifteen, if anda hadn't...
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posted by hannah_vampire
It was late and I think I had fallen asleep on damon, I really didn't want to go utama But soon I would have to and thats when i would talk to my dad about this stuff.

I woke up and I was in this very nice room, I am supirsed that Damon has a bed, I thought vamps didn't sleep although it could be for decoration. "Had a good sleep" I jumped up qiuck way to quick making a painful cracky nosie I think from from leg "sorry Belle should have knocked i thought anda would be sleepy".

I didn't care more, I hated that we took it slow and getting in trouble would tunjuk my dad why anda shouldn't like To Ariel-Belle....
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Need to know Basis, Rules and Legislations of a Vampires’ World
The Cult of Vampires was an ancient ritual of vampire corpses, half-vampires, and mystic creatures.
Normal vampires, and Serigala Jadian were likely to join, too.
Everyone who was apart of the cult, dies after 40,000 years.
Anyone who didn’t sertai the cult, lives forever.
Too bad your born a vult.
If anda want to run away from the cult atau un-join the cult, anda will die, atau suffer extreme pain and then die.
Usually, it’s option two.
People who just died, were very lucky.
If anda have suffered great deals of physical pain before joining...
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posted by coolie
Both Crack-a-bottle and Shatter-a-glass were teens, and their names had a lot in common. Crack-a-bottle and Shatter-a-glass. Hee Hee. The soalan right now is how the heck do we get out of here?” berkata bill. Shatter-a-glass searched in her pockets. hei my phone, the only phone in the world that lets anda text and do nothing else,” berkata Shatter-a-glass. How will that help?” asked Crack-a-bottle. I could text a plane to fly over here and pick us up!” answered Shatter-a-glass. Shatter-a-glass was thinking for a moment. She didn’t have a clue of what number she text so she did every combination...
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"Drip,drop,drip drop."I couldn't tell if it was the rain atau the tears running down from my face that had was drip dropping.I still couldn't believe Joel actually left me here all sejak myself.Alone in this pouring thunderstorm.Joel was suppose to my best friend,my soul mate,my lover but instead he became the opposite,the total jerk of my life.But the hardest part is that even now,now that tears flood my face and my hati, tengah-tengah is completely torn I still Cinta Joel as if he hasn't done anything wrong.I knew I wouldn't be able to just let him go like that;I don't think I will be able to get over him ever!...
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Ellen Collins is Moving to a new town.which means a new life,new house and new friends.Her new utama was in the middle of town.It was huge.
"Mom...I don't like it here no one will like me." Ellen berkata to her mother concerned her partners were separated.It was a tough time for her.
"Not now hunny I'm on a very important business call.Why don't anda go to school?" Her mom said.Her mom was a very impotent business women
"Can I have some money?For some food." Ellen said.
"Yeah yeah here's a twenty." Her mom berkata handing her a twenty dollar bill.
"Thanks."
"Go,go."
Ellen went in town,She stop a girl around...
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Academic life has challenging demands. Students are expected to manage their time wisely between their academic requirements and extra-curricular activities. Living in a time when the world requires highly sophisticated demands, this challenge is no easy feat. No one understands this dilemma better than professional writers, students, retirees, and freelancers specializing in academic Penulisan seeking to offer their excellent services to students who intends to maintain a good academic standing but needs some assistance in completing academic requirements due to time constraints and limited...
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posted by ashesandwine
It's been a while since I write anything here! I just didn't feel like posting this on my spot, so I thought I would post it here!


I looked into his eyes, not knowing what to think... It's been so long, so much has happened and yet I feel just like I did that first time!
I hate thinking of it... Every word that comes out of my mouth seems to fade away as soon as it reaches the air. Every thought that comes to my mind is full of pain and hate, and yet I never seem to be sad!
I face life with a smile in my face, with a mask in my heart! I keep my thoughts close, not letting anyone reach them!
I...
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After the film they all walk to Antiworld to hang out for awhile. They all laid on the grass, peacefully thinking about Rawak things in their lives. Grito was watching over them, thinking that Cassie, Nathan, Slone and Lindsay may be in trouble if they keep their bonds with the others. Parvulo was sleeping on Grito’s shoulder, making no sound what so ever. Grito himself was getting drowsy, he quickly fell asleep, and he hadn’t slept in a few days, watching over them. What could stop something from attacking them now, Grito is asleep, and a sneak attack and Grito may not be able to save...
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Marley was bleeding from his wound, he was fighting the same sort of creature as the others, it was small but it was fast plus its forearms are used like clubs. The creature had marks all over its body, due to Marley’s elbows and knees. It swung its arm again, hitting Marley straight in the shin, Marley was quick to react and Slash up the creatures face. It left four claw like marks on its face; Marley looked at his hand and notice that his nails had pointed, as the creature wiped it’s eye he looked at Marley and saw that his eyes had become yellow. Marley quickly struck the creature in...
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Please read the other chapters and tell me whether this is any good atau not. And if anda don't like it, please give constructive critisicm.



The last of the makan malam, majlis makan malam guests poured out of Joseph Warren's house. He didn't have makan malam, majlis makan malam parties often because they usually resulted in fight's between two different people atau parties with extremely different political views. Fortunately, their was only one, small conflict on whether America should be fighting communism in other coutries atau not. Joeseph of course took the side of fighting communism, and so did a couple of others. But most of the other people...
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posted by joe-edwardfan
Chapter 12
6 bulan later
School was boring as always everyone in the school looked at us like they did with the Cullen's and as for me and matt we got closer! I really liked him ,almost loved him but not the kind of Cinta my hati, tengah-tengah held for edward it was different like he can complete me we went to are medow every hari after school and talked and other stuff as anda know but I never slept with him not know I wasn’t ready I just have this stupid stupid idea like I'm cheating on him but that isnt true he leaft me and got over me and started dating another vamp that I'm sure was Tanya.i hate him I...
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“Train us? For what?” Opal Asked. Grito didn’t say anything; he started pointing, first at himself then to Marley, Alec, Mia then Opal. “Train us to fight of creatures” berkata Mia. Grito nodded, and then he looked at the fairy on his shoulder. The fairy nodded and flew up into the air and created a square in the air, like a movie screen. On it pictures of demons and humans being attack appeared, much to the four friends’ disgust. “What the hell is going on here?” Alec Asked. “This is why I was sent to train you, so this stops happening to innocent humans” berkata Grito. “When...
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