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This is A story of tragic, betrayal, and romance blooms through a time of desperate and dark times. This story has no relation to any actual historical events, and anything depicted in this story is not true and did not take place in actual French history. This story was made for entertainment purposes, and only a name of a few locations actually exists.



In the late 1800s, Alchemy was a major part of European Culture, but was prohibited sejak the Church, for Alchemic teachings went against God’s teachings and the Catholic beliefs. In a Small town off the borderlines of Paris France, a middle aged Alchemist, Victor Alexander Damè conducts strange experiments in secret, for his tests required human sacrifice, which was forbidden sejak all Alchemists alike and abolished use of alchemy sejak the church of Catholics. He hires exiles of the Country of France to find potential sacrifices, which mostly ranged from higher up classmen in which he had strife against to various members of the French Court.

His curiosity and lack of a Heir lead him to discover a peasant boy named Nathaniel and his older brother Simon. Both boys had been abandoned from their English father after their mother died when they were both fairly young, and ever since they lived on the streets relying on stolen Makanan and any selamat, peti deposit keselamatan water they could find. Nathaniel at the age of 10 had obtained the illness known as Thantosis, a serious disease that caused the slow decay of the inner organs.

Realizing that his baby brother’s time was short, Simon desperately tries to find shelter for the both of them sejak going around various houses in England trying to get families to take either both of them atau at least his ill ridden brother in. No one would take them in, in fear of catching the disease themselves, Simon pleaded for them to let them stay, but only found disappointment, One hari as Winter is fast approaching, Simon’s patience grows fairly thin with people as his brother starts to tunjuk lebih signs of the disease taking affect when Nathaniel starts to cough out large amounts of blood.

The boys soon gather attention from two fairly intoxicated men. They start to boast about their healthy sons, and pick at Nathaniel’s weakened and ill stricken state, out of anger and his weakened will power, Simon grabs a rock and pins the taller and larger man to the ground and with one hard swing, smashes the rock against his head, instantly killing him. The other man had escaped after this, and Simon, realizing what he had done, out of fear that he would be trialed and sentenced to Death sejak the British Police, he runs off with Nathaniel, stowing away on a Merchants Carriage heading to France where he manages to get a job in the small town of Damèberg.

For a time, the man Simon worked for let him and his younger brother stay in the bangsal in which Simon worked in the most as payment for Simon’s work. Simon is relieved of this case, feeling like he and his brother can live a semi normal life, without the struggles of life on the street. 5 years past and word starts reaching the French Court of a Boy who was a suspect of murder escaped England and was hiding somewhere in France.

Terrified of someone finding them, Simon runs away from the Farm, leaving a note, which simply stated his regrets, and his sincerest apology over the murder of Alfred J. Jones. Now back onto the streets, Nathaniel’s condition starts to worsen even lebih so then it had been, Simon tries desperately to keep his brother out of the harm of the crime-ridden streets of Damèberg. One night, drunken men, who claimed that they mencuri their money and food, corner Simon and Nathaniel; Simon tries to explain to them the situation. Not bothering to listen, one of the men hits Simon, and continues to beat him senseless while Nathaniel watches helplessly.


Simon facing the fact that this man was going to kill him, starts to accept death, for his death would redeem his sin of murdering Alfred, before the final blow the man is stopped sejak an elder gentleman, who the men recognize as Victor Damè. Victor saves the boys and brings them to his istana, castle on the borderline of Paris and Damèberg. Once Simon has recovered, he discovers that Victor is an Alchemist and he pleas for him to save his brother from the grips of the wretched disease, having known that Alchemist were known to do any miracles that succeeded the current knowledge of medical research.

Victor informs him that he cannot perform such Alchemy, but had something that might keep his brother alive for a bit longer then what he would have had. Simon Insisted that he gave him the antidote, proclaiming to do whatever he wanted him to do. Victor seizes the opportunity to make use of the young adult. For the seterusnya couple months Victor has Simon retrieve former convicts from the prison in Damèberg, Simon doesn’t soalan this request at first, but he grows lebih confused as time progresses.

One hari when returning from an errand, Simon notices his brother is nowhere to be found, he imminently confronts Victor, slightly angered with this, but calms down slightly when Victor states that he merely had brought Nathaniel into a room in the basement in preparation to receive the antidote. Simon grows slightly suspicious when he asks to see his brother and Victor states that Nathaniel was in no condition to be seen in, and soon he begins to investigate behind Victor’s back.

Simon having conducted research from every book he could find in Victor’s library, he comes to a horrifying conclusion. Victor was using the forbidden alchemy of Human Transmogrification in an attempt to create a relic of ancient times, which granted the user immortality. Realizing the danger he had put himself and his brother in, he realizes he must find his brother and escape.

Late at night Simon sneaks from his room and tries to make his way to the basement to retrieve Nathaniel, when Victor catches onto his intentions and imminently tries to kill him, Victor burns down the castle, trying to take Simon down with it. Simon barely escapes the wreckage engulfed in flames, and tries to find shelter in a near sejak forest.

Unsure of rather atau not his brother is alive; he collapses from exhaustion, once lebih ready to face his death. He wakes up several weeks later, finding himself in a unfamiliar room. He learns that a man named Alphonse Heisenberg, a German/French merchant who had connections with Victor, rescued him.

He informs Simon that ore then likely Victor had his brother locked up in his main building of operations, the deepest bowels of the Cathedral of Notre Dame in Paris. Urgent to get there Simon tries to make his way to the door, but is stopped sejak Alphonse, who states that he was in no condition to take on Victor. He went on to explain to Simon that Victor was far beyond a normal human, he was already on his way to immortality, and that it would take a equally skilled Alchemist to take him down.

Simon begs him to teach him Alchemy, Alphonse simply disagrees, not having any knowledge of Alchemy, but sends him off to a friend. Thus Simon spends 7 months training and learning Alchemy, under a elder Alchemist named Johann, who sought refuge in Berlin, Germany. Simon returns the utama of Alphonse, only to learn that he been kidnapped and taken as prisoner sejak Victor as described in a note left sejak Alphonse which stated that Victor had already gotten to his family.

Simon vows that with his newfound strengths he will redeem not only him, but save his brother and the man who saved his life, and to end Victor once and for all. During his travel to Paris, he runs into a young female, named Joanna, who he bumped into as she was running from the police due to that she had mencuri some roti from a local merchant. Reminded of how he used to live before Victor, he takes her and hides her in a near sejak Ally, and distracts the Police with his Alchemy allowing both to make a quick escape.

Realizing he was an Alchemist and his purpose she begs him to let her join, and it’s revealed that she is the only living daughter to Alphonse, who managed to escape Victor’s raid of their utama two months before. He reluctantly agrees, as he had no real choice and couldn’t leave her behind. Both take on the Journey to make their way to France, along the way getting into all sorts of trouble, with the German Police on their tails, they reach the outskirts of France, and take refuge in a near sejak Inn, and begin to plan out their means of attack. What awaits them at Notre Dame? Will they be Reunited with missing family? What happens when things get a little out of hand? Will Simon manage to see his brother Alive?
posted by morganaforever
Full of excitement, Nicole and Ellie arrived at the fairground. They walked through the towering gates, expecting laughter and chatter – but everything remained quiet. No music, no noise, nothing! The place was deserted. A strong gust of wind blew, making them shiver. As they walked on, it began to get darker. Gradually, the sky turned from a bright blue to black. One sejak one the lights of the fairground flickered on, illuminating the black sky. As they passed sejak The Haunted Mine, it seemed to be inviting them to have a go. A man clad completely in black was waiting beside the entrance.

“Can...
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It probably took anda a while to learn the 26 letters of the alphabet back when anda started school. But actually, anda should count yourself lucky. Some languages use alphabets with many lebih letters than that. Russian, for example, has 33 letters, and the Khmer language of Cambodia has over 70. And in China and Japan, where they write with signs called 'characters', there are hundreds, even thousands of different shapes to remember. Japanese primary school children are expected to learn about a thousand characters before they can go on to high school!
posted by candyvtoby511
Tess’s parents were shot down right before her eyes, coming out through the side door of a theatre. She couldn’t understand why he had killed them and not her. The murderer was young, maybe even the same age as herself. He was disguised as an older man, but she could still tell he was quite young, 14 atau so.
Tess is walking late at night with her dog alone, thinking about her parent’s mysterious murderer; why didn’t he kill her as well? What motive did he have to kill them? She ponders over the words her mother spoke in her dying breath; what did she mean that I shouldn’t trust him?...
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 Emmanuel Cuts The Ribbon to Open Fashion Week Gibraltar - (Picture sejak emas Productions Studios (Gibraltar) www.goldps.com)
Emmanuel Cuts The Ribbon to Open Fashion Week Gibraltar - (Picture by Gold Productions Studios (Gibraltar) www.goldps.com)
Emmanuel Ray, Britain’s Fashion ikon of The tahun 2011 (Fashions Finest Awards), successfully opened Fashion Week Gibraltar on 18 April 2012 at the Casemates Gallery in Gibraltar.
London – In front of an excited crowd Emmanuel Raygave a short speech thanking everyone who came to the opening, his publicist David J Mann, director ofHighmore PR, and Fashion Week Gibraltar’s organiser and fashion designer Reene Weston. He then proceeded to cut the red ribbon allowing everyone to start their Fashion Week experience.
Emmanuel had this to say about the opening,
“What an amazing experience it was....
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If i get enough komen-komen i will extend it.

It was damp, smelled of earth and pine, I heard leaves rustle, twigs snap as Haiwan scurried in the pokok tops. I wasn't supposed to be here, this wasn't my room, my bed. I was supposed to me in sejak cottage on eagle lake. I was supposed to be asleep, bahagian, atas bunk with my younger brother Elliot on the bottom. I was supposed to be smelling fabric softener and hear the soft snore from little Elli, feel the heat of my cat sleeping on my chest. I opened my eyes and I could see the sky, black with soft twinkle of a million bintang and the florescent glow of the moon....
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posted by precious211
“Before we leave I must warn you. We are now entering alien territory, so be careful and considerate to you’re new surroundings. One stupid mistake can get you, and everyone around anda killed.”

The safety instructor’s voice boomed across the large, air conditioned spaceship. It sounded oddly cheerful for someone who had just told them that they could all die.
Everyone tried to see where her line of vision was pointing towards. It was aimed toward the windows.
Kendra glanced through them and, and gulped. They were about four thousand feet above sea level, and the angkasa craft had just...
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Using correct grammar and sentence structure is vital if anda want to convey your thoughts accurately. anda also want your Penulisan to hold the reader's attention. Nothing is lebih annoying than Membaca a manuscript littered with grammatical errors. The error of Penulisan sentence fragments is a common error. Sentence fragments are incomplete sentences that don't express a complete thought.

tips:
1


Have a subject for every verb. The subject is the actor in the sentence. The verb is the action taken in a sentence.

2


Make sure all of your dependent clauses have a completing thought. An independent...
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posted by cutiegirl01
(Please tell me your opinion on my story and be truthful please!)

    “Erik get down here now!” My father yelled.
    “I’m coming, I’m coming!” I hurried down the stairs. I learned in the last 17 years I’ve been alive, that if my dad calls me I need to be down fast…or else…
    I got down the stairs, and went into the living room where he always sat on his days off. “Yes, dad? What can I get you?”
    My mother smiled up at me from her book, “You are such a good son, Erik-“
    My...
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posted by NormalcyIsDead
Boom boom clap
Bounce your head, snap
To the classic, to the rap


Step ball change
Basic with a buck
Pleay, tour jete
Bounce your head to the rock


One two three,
Two two three,
Count along with your head
Mosh with the beat


Hop shuffle hop back
Twirl your arms, bend your back
Do the thingamajiggie
Wear out your taps

Breathe it in, breathe it out
Reach for the sky, dance on the ground
Flitter here, gallop there
Lose yourself anywhere

Flow with the music
Feel it in your veins
As anda bounce your head, snap
Boom boom clap
posted by dragonwriter
As light fades the brightest of souls can even be turned to do the darkest of things. As time time pushes ke hadapan the mind and body of an individual changes for either good atau bad. the decisions they make and the things they do will stick with them forever. I was told this many years lalu sejak a wise old man that fortold my future. He berkata "the one with the dragon soul is not alone in the world he knows." After being told this it left me nothing but confused but i had a feeling that it wouldn't be the last time i heard of it.
posted by StarsGoBlue
God's Lost Child 
Chapter 2: An Indefinite Prisoner Of War 

"Unbelievable! Un-fucking-believable."
A nerdy blonde cussed as he stormed  through the upper deck of Sovereign, his hands raised above his head in protest. 
"Oh, let's put Baird in charge of the rookie! Since he's busy anyway. Let's just give him lebih shit to do, that's easier on us!"
He continued to fume violently as Nicole followed a selamat, peti deposit keselamatan distance behind. The rest of Delta Squad had dispersed to their cabins to change into their night attire. Baird had been chosen to school the rookie, thanks to his big mouth.  After a bit of sighing...
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In this series of guides, I'll be menunjukkan anda the best techniques for Penulisan your story. These are tried-and-true techniques, and they work.
First up: characters. Every story has characters. We all know that. But what anda may not realize is that some portions of a character need not be mentioned. Why spend three pages on your character's dimples if they have nothing to do with the plot? In order to keep your readers hooked, anda have to yourself to things that are involved with the plot.
Before anda decide on a plot, anda should get to know each of your characters. After all, you're telling...
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posted by PhoenixRoyale
This is another poem that I have written. It was inspired sejak some komen-komen about stuffed animals/plushies on YouTube being people's friends. Enjoy.
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The Stuffed Animal.
To some, they are stupid.
They are useless.
They are disgusting little balls of fluff.

Those people think that it's necessary
to pick on the innocence of others
for having a collection of their own.
They poke fun, they tease, they even insult.

They target that person's age.
Sometimes even their gender.
They think they need to grow up.
They think these fluffy plushies are meant for babies.

But to those innocent people,
the ones who are quite...
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posted by shenelopefan
La parte prohibida del parque

"La depresión es la que guía, la alegría es la que llega"

En la ciudad dónde yo vivía de niña, había un parque en dónde siempre pasaba las tardes con mis amigos. Éramos un grupito de niñas y niños que nos juntábamos a jugar en ronda, cantábamos canciones que no tenían sentido (casi nuestro propio idioma, de hecho) y recorríamos todo el parque jugando a las escondidillas.

Bueno, no todo el parque porque había una a la que los adultos no les gustaba que vayamos. Era un sector tan lleno de árboles que, desde afuera parecía una selva en medio de un parque...
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The room is silent, as always. Nothing can be heard, aside from the soft rasp of pencil on paper. Words take form, joining various thoughts into one whole. On the outside, nothing is different from the average writer. To find what sets me apart, we must look deeper than the surface.
Inside my mind, imej and ideas race about, sometimes colliding, sometimes not. This whirlwind is composed of everything I know, read, seen, heard, atau thought of. It is here that my greatest works begin to form.
To tunjuk how thw whiirlwind works, let us have an example. During practice for spring track, I noticed...
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posted by Lord_Anubis
If anda mates like it, comment, I'll make lebih if anyone notices it =3

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''Oi, anda guys! What are anda doin'?!'' screamed a brown haired boy from the street.
''Mind your own business and go back under your momma's skirt, atau you'll get some too!'' replied the tallest boy on playground, probably the leader of the rest 4 boys.
5 of them were teasing one small boy, taking away from him candies and ruining his game on playground. The brown haired boy frowned with his black eyes and started walking towards them.
''You scum really have guts! 5 tall Anjing on 1 small...
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posted by dragonsmemory
The Eden Chronicles is the Fantasi series I am currently working on. As the series is in progress, I decided to add a club here, allowing you, Reader, to tell me your thoughts.
In Penulisan the series, I decided to document the entire history of Eden. I called this place Eden because it is where the spirits of dead Haiwan and plants are taken. No humanspirit has ever been pure enough to come here. Eden is a true paradise.
The first book, A Little Bit lebih Than Love, takes place toward the end of Eden's history. Later in the series, I hope to explain the past. Once I get caught up, I will then...
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posted by Kimi4312
Chapter 3: Here It Goes Again.
Roxana woke up one night to hear a loud howl outside her window, she slided herself out of katil with her covers wrapped around her, she walked toward the window and saw a somewhat a large white serigala, wolf outside, watching her then it turned its head to hear other Serigala howling, the white serigala, wolf runs off to follow the howl, Roxana felt like she knew that serigala, wolf for a long time, Roxana walked back to her katil and lies down, but she couldn't sleep, she kept tossing and turning but she couldn't sleep, she sat up, grab her wallet and pull out a foto of a beautiful, pale-skinned,...
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posted by Kimi4312
Chapter 1: Don't Change Me.
A young and beautiful succubus named Roxana opened her green eyes as she sees the sun flooded her dark room with lights from her windows, she sat up in her twin bed, the mattress was tan and her covers were Chocolate brown color, she pulled herself out of the katil and throws on her black tank top, then she slipped on her jeans on her long and beautiful legs, Roxana then walked in her bathroom and brushed her long red hair slowly as she stares at herself in the mirrior, she put her brush on the sink and walked outside, as she walks, she turns around as she feels like...
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We were builders. We were builders, fighters, scholars, but lebih importantly, friends. When the Government took all our rights away, our food, money, our culture, we allied ourselves against it. But they had a machine. A machine that could sail the seas and air. It was called, The Oppresive. The Oppresive forced us underground, making us creatures of the very soil they walk on. But it is time for our revolution. We have a great machine, bigger than the Oppresive, and stronger than it. It will trample them like a boy tramples grass. No resistance at all, we are sure of it. We are ready. We have...
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